Question

Here's my thesis for an essay on the Scarlet Letter.

In Nathaniel Hawthorne’s The Scarlet Letter, Hawthorne creates Pearl as an allegory of Hester Prynne’s anima, a character foil unrestricted by circumstantial limits aggrandized by Hawthorne’s use of Pearl as a foil to the scarlet letter itself.

Decent?

Answer 1

I think it's fine. But make sure you can support it in your body paragraphs, otherwise having such a complicated thesis is worthless.

Answer 2

I think it is totally nonsense.

Answer 3

http://www.onelook.com/?w=nonsense&ls=a

Answer 4

I agree with Bobpursley. You've used many big words that basically say nothing.
http://www.answers.com/nonsense

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Be sure you're clear on the meanings and uses of these words:

http://www.answers.com/allegory

http://www.answers.com/anima

http://www.answers.com/foil
Noun definition #3.

And from then on, your "sentence" makes no sense to me at all. Try rephrasing in better, more straightforward words. If I ever saw sentences like this in my students' writing, I asked them to explain themselves to me without having their papers in front of them. Can you do that? And make sense?

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm

Answer 5

Instead of one long sentence, there is no rule that says a thesis statement can not consist of two sentenes.

Answer 6

I agree with BobPursley and Writeacher entirely!!!!

I think Shakespeare said it well, "sound and fury signifying nothing".

What did you really want to say before you found all those big words? Pretend your teacher doesn't have a dictionary, and be as simple and straightforward as possible in telling what Pearl's purpose in the book is.