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revise thesis statement
Thesis sentence: When I order the liquors for my business I believe it is a useless expense of using the online service, because I have to order certain quantities from the liquor commission, but when parties are given for our clientele, I find out that the costs where worth it.
Thesis sentence: When I order the liquors for my business I believe it is a useless expense of using the online service, because I have to order certain quantities from the liquor commission, but when parties are given for our clientele, I find out that the costs where worth it.
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Ms. Sue
Ordering liquor from an online service is worth the cost.