narrative poem

John and Fred are the awesomest friends
They hang all day everyday
They do homework together
They don't ever fight

A girl named Isabel is new at their school
She is funny and fun
She is sweet and beautiful
They both really like her

Soon they were fighting for her
They soon became no longer friends
They had fought the first time
Running from each other and being mean

They didn't stop for a long time
Until they saw she liked someone else
The tall brown-haired boy woth dark brown eyes
Who both despised for being a jerk

Soon they both saw how bad they've been
They are too good of friends to fight over this
It wasn't worth ruining everything it did
Which taught them a valuable lesson

They both were embarrassed for what they did
Their fight was a silly mistake
Their friendship is too valuable
And destroying it was a loss

They are tight friends again.

-------CAN YOU CORRECT MY POEM PLEASE TO SEE IF IT IS A GOOD NARRATIVE POEM? THANK YOU!

2 answers

It has a good moral! You might look at th is line one more time:
Who both despised for being a jerk

It should be Whom both despised, etc.

Sra
And I don't believe "awesomest" is really a word!! To use "most awsome" would work fine.