Frist sentence: "the" is unnecessary before "athletes." I would make the statement about "banners" a separate sentence. "don't forget" is clumsy if you are explaining why OPC is good for athletes. The reader may not know about them to forget them.
Second sentence: "OPC as A school..." then make the verb agree with the subject. A series: "football, basketball, soccer" needs an "and."
The rest of it looks good.
I need someone's help on editing my paragraph....
OPC is a great place for an athlete because OPC offers many options for the athletes and don’t forget about their countless banners. OPC as school give the athlete’s the opportunity to choose from a wide variety of sports teams like football, basketball, soccer; we also offer less known sports like cricket, water polo and more for everyone. However, if there are athletes who still haven’t found the team they are looking for, we are always willing to take ideas from athletes to start new teams/clubs for them. We are also proud to show the new coming athletes to OPC our athletic abilities with all of our championships we have won over the years; we proudly hold the title of most provincial championship to show our future athletes what OPC is capable of. OPC is a place for talented athletes and those who are willing to improve.
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