I need help to proof check my annotations for this poem and to tell me which poetic devices/techniques I am missing (annotations are all the way at the bottom).
Poem: For the Fallen by Laurence Binyon
Rhyme scheme will be shown as "A, B, C, D" as per regular.
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A With proud thanksgiving, a mother for her children,
B England mourns for her dead across the sea.
C Flesh of her flesh they were, spirit of her spirit,
B Fallen in the cause of the free.
D Solemn the drums thrill; Death august and royal
E Sings sorrow up into immortal spheres,
F There is music in the midst of desolation
E And a glory that shines upon our tears.
G They went with songs to the battle, they were young,
H Straight of limb, true of eye, steady and aglow.
I They were staunch to the end against odds uncounted;
G They fell with their faces to the foe.
J They shall grow not old, as we that are left grow old:
K Age shall not weary them, nor the years contemn.
L At the going down of the sun and in the morning
K We will remember them.
M They mingle not with their laughing comrades again;
N They sit no more at familiar tables of home;
O They have no lot in our labour of the day-time;
N They sleep beyond England's foam.
P But where our desires are and our hopes profound,
Q Felt as a well-spring that is hidden from sight,
R To the innermost heart of their own land they are known
Q As the stars are known to the Night;
S As the stars that shall be bright when we are dust,
T Moving in marches upon the heavenly plain;
U As the stars that are starry in the time of our darkness,
T To the end, to the end, they remain.
Annotations:
Stanza 1
Line 1: Enjambment, symbolism
Line 2: Personification, imagery, metaphor
Line 3: Repetition, imagery, enjambment
Line 4: Metaphor
Stanza 2
Line 1: Imagery, enjambment, jargon
Line 2: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 3: Enjambment, symbolism
Line 4: Personification
Stanza 3
Line 1: Enjambment, metaphor
Line 2: Metaphor, jargon
Line 3: Pathos, tone, enjambment
Line 4: Metaphor
Stanza 4
Line 1: Metaphor, enjambment
Line 2: Personification
Line 3: Enjambment
Line 4: Tone, assonance
Stanza 5
Line 1: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 2: Enjambment, metaphor
Line 3: Enjambment, Jargon, metaphor
Line 4: Jargon, metaphor
Stanza 6
Line 1: Enjambment
Line 2: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 3: Enjambment, jargon, metaphor
Line 4: Enjambment, personification, tone
(Final) Stanza 7
Line 1: Enjambment, metaphor, tone
Line 2: Enjambment, metaphor, allusion
Line 3: Enjambment, metaphor
Line 4: Repetition, metaphor, tone
Please correct any misused techniques and add any that I have missed. Thank you so much for your time. :)
3 answers
inˈjambmənt,enˈjam(b)mənt/
noun
noun: enjambement; plural noun: enjambements; noun: enjambment; plural noun: enjambments
(in verse) the continuation of a sentence without a pause beyond the end of a line, couplet, or stanza.
Lines 1 and 3 both end with a comma, a pause. In stanza 6, where is there any jargon? I don't see any. jar·gon1
ˈjärɡən/
noun
noun: jargon; plural noun: jargons
special words or expressions that are used by a particular profession or group and are difficult for others to understand.
"legal jargon"