I created my resume, however my profile paragraph seems a little too wordy any ideas or thoughts on how I can change/improve it?

PROFILE:
Seeking an intern or entry position in Project Management where I can develop and excel while giving my best to an employer. Although I have extensive experience in dealing with customers and other individuals, I have a great deal of ambition, love to learn, and am always up to any challenge that may approach me. I am loyal, dedicated, extensively organized, a fast learner, work well under pressure, and have proven excellence in leadership skills. In addition I get along well with others, while also working efficiently on my own.

EDUCATION

Bachelor of Business Administration
October 2008 – November 2008
American InterContinental University
Concentration: Project Management
GPA: N/A
Associate of Business Administration
August 2006 – September 2007
American InterContinental University
Concentration: Business Arts
GPA: 3.93

Accomplishments: Dean's list every semester, Great leadership skills: Group leader in AIU for 16 group projects, 15 out of 16 received an outstanding A+; the other one received a B.
Clubs: Management, Entrepreneurship, Workplace Learning Training & Development, IT Professionals
Education Goals & Objectives
Currently seeking a Bachelors degree in Project Management, plans to continue include an Advanced Six Sigma Master’s Degree from Villanova University following by a Master’s Degree in Business Administration concentrating in Project Management.


WORK HISTORY:
Receptionist
May 2007 – Present
Dr. Chengot (Amityville Heart Center)
Amityville, NY
- Received phone calls, determined nature of calls and assisted them
- Successfully arranged appointments between patients and doctors
- Responsible for taking messages, delivering and replying
- Strong work ethic and superior interpersonal, customer service and communication skills
- Excellent time management skills that allow for the multi-tasking of all responsibilities
- Billed patients with diagnosis codes
- Filed Charts and paperwork in the correct location
Accomplishments: Reorganized files in first month
Sales Associate
October 2003 – January 2004
Baker’s Footwear
Massapequa, NY
- Sold merchandise to customers.
- Informed customers on promotional items to increase sales.
- Organized merchandise by size and type.
- Kept up with cleaning.
- Provided great customer service.
- Closed store, prepared closing paperwork, closed out cashier.
Accomplishments: Increased sales by 2%

Sales Associate/Photographer
September 2005 – May 2007
CPI – Sears Portrait Studio
Massapequa, NY
- Photographing individuals, preparing the scene, placing the camera in adequate position.
- Selling merchandise, and upgrading sales therefore creating a larger profit for CPI.
- Preparing pictures for pick up, and selling additional merchandise at closing of sale.
- Always exceeded in customer service by making sure each customer left happy.
- Outreach (calling customers) was performed to increase customers, as well as profits.
- Opening and closing the store, cashing out, as well as required closing paperwork.
- Kept up with cleaning, and other store requirements.
- Worked with Adobe Photoshop.
Accomplishments: Proven excellence in customer service rating 98.7%, Kept above company standards with average sales of $118 per customer.
Cashier
June 2001 – January 2005
McDonald’s
Lindenhurst, NY
- Greeted customers making them feel welcome.
- Took orders and presented them in the correct order.
- Clean all messes which needed attention
- In addition, also worked with drive-thru, and food preparation
- Assisted in opening and closing the store
SKILLS & ACHIEVEMENTS
- Computer Skills: Microsoft Office (Word, Excel, Outlook & PowerPoint), Adobe Photoshop, Windows XP, MAC.
- Excellent mathematical skills in logic and algebra.
- Committed to community service. Extensive volunteer history including involvement with local church, ADHD and problem children, worked with needy children.
- Organizes and maintains a 4.5/5 star local children’s online playgroup where parents and children get together for organized events such as parks, local areas, homes, and mother night outs without the children

Also I have a cover letter if someone wouldn't mind giving me their ideas on it.

2 answers

P.S. The last sentence with "Organizes" might be better in the past tense: "Organized" as the rest of the items are.
idk..
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