I am hoping someone can give me feedback on the following short paragraph on the book "Devil's Highway." I am especially concerned with whether I am using verb tenses correctly.

"Devil's Highway" de Luis Alberto Urrea es un libro muy impactante y muy triste. Quisiera decir que pueda conmover a cualquiera persona, pero yo sé que hay personas que tienen muchos prejuicios y no podrían compadecerse de las personas que cruzan la frontera en condiciónes duras y peligrosas. Pero si uno lo leyera con una mentalidad abierta, se sentiría compasión.

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The grammar isn't perfect, but the wording is great. :) If you want the grammar to be 100% perfect then just post another question, and I'd be glad to help!!!
Thank you so much for the positive feedback. Although the most important thing for me is that it can be clearly understood, I also would love to know what you think of the grammar! That is very kind of you to offer.
Even the grammar is quite good. Here are 2 things to make it a bit better:

1. prejuicios y no podrían = prejuicios y que no podrían

2. condiciónes = condiciones (no accent in the plural)

Yo diría que es bien hecho.

Sra (aka Mme)
Here is the very best impression you give = the correct use of the Subjuncive. Native speakers don't always have that!

Sra
¡Muchas gracias!
The subjunctive is so difficult but my friends who are native speakers assure me that they don't understand it all perfectly (but of course for them they frequently can sense when it is incorrect/correct). I hope to keep practicing so it will come more naturally!
Olé and ole = depending upon where you are!

Sra
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