Draft an email of at least four complete sentences to Deb Walker the designated trainer:

Confirm the arrangements for the seminar providing only the information she needs to arrive at the right place at the right time.

Copy both to Mr, Dittmer and Ms. Hopkins

Create an appropriate email business address for yourself and include it after the signature block .

Dear Deb:
Confirm my understanding of our arrangements as we discussed for a seminar to be held at Broadworth General Hospital on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. The date is to be July 20, 2012 at 9 am in conference room 200, on second floor. The seminar is to be 2 hours long with a 15 minute break during which refreshments will be provided by the hospital cafeteria. I understand you will provide pamphlets and help line numbers for our attendees along with a projector and screen to show additional information to further the understanding of the seminar.

Please contact me at 123-456-7890 with any questions you may have.

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Dear Deb:
I am confirming my understanding of our arrangements as we discussed for a seminar to be held at Broadworth General Hospital on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. The date is to be July 20, 2012 at 9 am in conference room 200, on second floor. The seminar is to be 2 hours long with a 15 minute break during which refreshments will be provided by the hospital cafeteria. I understand you will provide pamphlets and help line numbers for our attendees along with a projector and screen to show additional information to further the understanding of the seminar.

Please contact me at 123-456-7890 with any questions you may have.
Dear Deb:
I am confirming our arrangements as we discussed for a seminar to be held at Broadworth General Hospital on sexual harassment and unlawful discrimination in the workplace. The date is to be July 20, 2012, at 9 am, in conference room 200, on the second floor. The seminar is to be two hours long with a 15-minute break, during which refreshments will be provided by the hospital cafeteria. I understand you will provide pamphlets and help-line numbers for our attendees, along with a projector and screen to show additional information to further the understanding of the seminar.

Please contact me at 123-456-7890 with any questions you may have.

Be sure to compare yours and mine very carefully ... to catch all the major and minor changes I made.

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