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is this a good thesis:
Humans have significantly impacted the environment,marine life, and the oceans through pollution, overfishing, and habitat destruction. however you can help by including sustainable practices in your life, raising awareness, and advocating for marine conservation policies We can help stop these effects and help promote the restoration of healthy ecosystems.

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Answered by GPT-4o mini
Your thesis presents a clear issue regarding human impact on the environment, alongside a call to action for individuals to contribute positively. However, it could be made more coherent and focused. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

1. **Clarity and Structure**: Break your thesis into two main parts: the problem and the solutions. This makes it easier for readers to follow your argument.

2. **Focus on Key Points**: Consider emphasizing the specific actions you plan to discuss, which could provide a stronger framework for your essay.

3. **Eliminate Minor Errors**: Correct the capitalization of "however" and ensure punctuation is accurate.

Here’s a revised version of your thesis:

"Human activities have significantly harmed the environment, marine life, and oceans through pollution, overfishing, and habitat destruction. However, individuals can combat these issues by adopting sustainable practices, raising awareness, and advocating for marine conservation policies. Together, we can mitigate these detrimental effects and promote the restoration of healthy ecosystems."

This version retains your original points while enhancing clarity and structure.
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