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Question

Q= List two or more messages you received from your parents about who you are and what you were about. Discuss how the messages were conveyed. Messages can be delivered directly through what our parents say to us or say to others about us. They can also be conveyed through their expectations and reactions to our behaviors. Discuss the impacts that the messages had on your self image and your behavior. (If you were not raised by your parents, then refer to your primary care givers) Include in your response specific messages related to race, class & gender.

A= Socialization is a lifelong progress during which we learn throughout familiar expectations and how to interact with other followers. As infants, we are fully subordinate to others to outlive. Our family not only inculcate us how to direct for ourselves, but also give us our first system of regard, model, and beliefs. It here with our family that we take say our first words and take our first steps. As a child, my oldest memories are about when I was four to five years old. I lived with my grandparents at that time. My family at that time where my grandparents, my young uncle, and my nanny. We lived in a big suburban villa, and there where a lot of people visiting and leaving. Everyone used to fear my grandfather, and whenever I would try to do something naughty I would be reminded that my grandfather would be told. So whenever I would get a stare from an adult that meant I did something wrong. My grandmother would always keep me pampered. She never allowed me to go outside and play with kids. Instead, she insisted to go visit our next same status neighbor. They had two daughters which were both a few years older than me. So growing up I liked playing with dolls instead of cars. When I was about eleven years old, I moved to live with my parents.

Answer 1

It's hard to read, to be honest. I admire your effort. Many of the words, however, seem to be misused In the first sentence, do you mean "progress" or "process"? Do you mean "throughout" or "through"? (There is a difference.) And do you mean "followers"? You're a rock star with groupies? Or do you mean that we learn how to interact withd others. You need to make sure you understand each and every word you use. You also don't need to pad your essay with big words to make it sound fancy or formal. Simple language, but precise language, is always best. And watch your usage, too. "...daughters which..." They are not humans/people? You might speak of trees which sway in the wind, but daughters WHO play with dolls.