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Im writing a college essay and Im not sure how to edit the first paragraph My existence thus far has been a musical performance. The world is my stage, the platform on which I can express myself creatively. My life is the reputable melody that I play from...

12 years ago

can someone help me edit this My Song My existence thus far has been a musical performance. The world is my stage, the platform upon which I express myself creatively. My life is the reputable melody that I play on my guitar, and the notes are my memories...

12 years ago

I need help editing a college admission writing supplement Connecticut College is definitely my first choice, as I believe that its exemplary academic and career opportunities will not only help me develop as a student, but also as a future professional....

11 years ago

I need help editing a college admission writing supplement Connecticut College is definitely my first choice, as I believe that its exemplary academic and career opportunities will not only help me develop as a student, but also as a future professional....

11 years ago

can someone edit this Connecticut College is easily my prime choice, as I believe that its exemplary academic and career opportunities will not only help me advance as a student, but also as a future professional English teacher. The college one chooses h...

11 years ago

Is there any way to edit or improve this? Community Service Description Grades(s) Hrs/wk wk/yr BuildOn Raised $2,000 through active fundraising and community service, donated all funds to Malawi, lived with a host 10 56 4 family for a week to fully ascert...

11 years ago

I have a 2.68 GPA. I know its bad, but this was mainly due to my mother dying freshman year and my fathers debilitating state after her death. I had a 2.0 freshman yr, a 2.65 sophmore yr, a 3,259 junior yr, and a 3.67 senior yr (so far) A Uconn admissions...

11 years ago

can someone edit my college essay? I was told by an admissions counselor to write a supplement describing my low cumulative GPA. It is a rough first draft, and probolaly needs to be heavily edited I am my truest and purest self, a mere child embarking on...

11 years ago

Can someone edit this Dear Admissions, I was pleased to find that the University of Connecticut allowed for applicants to submit a writing supplement along with their applications. So, I have taken this opportunity to show the main experiences that I have...

11 years ago

can someone help edit this? I literally need this in by tonight Dear Admissions, As I was recently speaking with an admissions officer from Uconn, I was exponentially pleased to be informed that the University of Connecticut has allowed for the submition...

11 years ago

can someone edit this. also, does it sound too melodramatic? And so, dear reader, I am no longer a child. I was unable to maintain my simplest and purest form, as the fragile innocence of my childhood has been taken. I am like an old book, torn and weathe...

11 years ago

What has the real GDP for the US been like for the past 10 years, and what does this mean for the economic health of the nation?

11 years ago

is there anything else wrong with it?

12 years ago

take your name off anonymous and try to talk to me again... seriously get a life

12 years ago

(The Holleran Center for Community Action and Public Policy offers student teaching internships and other career preparing programs) Connecticut College is easily my prime choice, as I believe that its exemplary academic and career opportunities will not...

11 years ago

its for a college and will be sent electronically. Is it developed enough?Is there anything that sounds wrong or that needs to be elaborated on?

11 years ago

where is it wordy to you

11 years ago

other than that do you think it could improved at all

11 years ago

Can you give me any advice on writing the essay

11 years ago

so how long do you think it should approximately be? im not sure whether I should be writing a 5 pg narrative or a short essay. also, do you give college advice?

11 years ago

what should be the main focus of the essay? Im obviously going to write about my mom, but im confused on how to structure it and how exactly to write it. It just seems confusing to me on how Im supposed to write an impacting and honest story while also cr...

11 years ago

should I write it like a story or more like an essay that I would write in school? Also, I don't know if you give college advice or not, but do you think I have a chance for being admitted?

11 years ago

Uconn and Ill probolaly also send it i as a writing supplement to Fairfield University

11 years ago

I know Uconns competitive but its definitely my first choice school, so Im trying to do everything I can to increase my chances of getting in. My cumulative GPA is under the 3.33 that they look for, but now its at a 3.77 so Im hoping they see that and und...

11 years ago

no the admissions counselor gave me an email to send the writing supplement to, so its not sent through the common app. She said it can be as "long as it takes to tell my story" and there really isnt a minimum sat requirement, but they only look at readin...

11 years ago

do any of you think I have a chance?

11 years ago

I know its definitely a reach school but as far as the essay goes, basically I should just write an essay about what happened freshan and sophmore year and how I grew from it? do you have any other advice on how to write it?

11 years ago

so should I make it shorter?

11 years ago

also is it that im writing too much in general or is it the vocab?

11 years ago

I entered a callous shell of myself,and once again allowed my obstacles overtake my life.

11 years ago

Im trying to say that I was like a hollow shell. I don't know Im trying to make the essay developed and stand out to the admissions officers, while also not making it overdone or overly complicated.

11 years ago

I am my truest and purest self, a mere child embarking on the beginning of life. So, how can it be that my mother, my main source of comfort, can possibly be dying? Stage 4 Metastases Melanoma Cancer: the doctor says is the grim diagnosis, the definite fa...

11 years ago

is the director of admissions the same as a dean of admssions?

11 years ago

and if so, would I just say; Dear Director of Admissions, Lee H. Melvin, or would I just put dear Lee H. Melvin,

11 years ago

never mind mind I figured it out

11 years ago

I did, I edited my entire essay, Im just trying to explain to admissions my point of view

11 years ago

what is it too wordy?

11 years ago