Write a letter in Spanish in which you describe something that happened to you which required consulting a nurse, doctor or dentist. Include in your description:

Question

why you needed a particular medical service
where you went to get it and what happened when you arrived
how you feel now after some time has passed
what will happen, or not happen, as a result of this experience

Dear friend,
A few months ago my teeth started hurting a lot. I went to the dentist's office to get them checked. When I arrived, the dentist told me that they were very crooked. He said he was going to give me some shots, and then put braces on them. After everything was done I felt sick. But now I'm fine and my teeth don't hurt. Until I have my braces I can't eat much sweets. But once the time is up, I have to go back to the dentist and get them off.

can someone tell me if this paragraph is ok. then i will try to start writing it in spanish

Answer 1

No comma after shots. Put a comma after everything was done.

While I have my braces,I can't eat many sweets.... would be better.

When my teeth are finally straight, I will go back to the dentist to get them off.