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Likewise, articles for F.O.X. news are found extremely biased. The article titled “Defense Secretary Warns Congress Against …” written by Trish Turner, Mike Emanuel and Nick Simeone seemed to support Bush more. Although, The writers include both sides of view of why Bush thinks his plan works and why the Senate opposes it. This article is biased by the choice of words and the tone that is used. The writers present the reader with the president’s declaration, "I've worked with a lot of members of Congress. I've listened carefully to their suggestions, and I have picked the plan that is most likely to succeed . . .” The article also included how Bush offered the Senate “to offer a better plan if they have one.” This quotation supports Bush and makes the reader’s feel like Bush is considering all options and not doing what he wants while the Senate is. The writers also make the Senate seem like the villains by not agreeing with Bush’s plan and that they don’t trust the president. “Hoyer also promised heavy inspection and scrutiny of the Bush Administration through “a lot” of hearings.”

Likewise,<~~See this and find a better transition word than "likewise" ~~>http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/transitions.htm articles for F.O.X. news are found extremely biased<~~biased in what direction, in what way?. The article titled “Defense Secretary Warns Congress Against …” written by Trish Turner, Mike Emanuel and Nick Simeone seemed to support Bush more<~~more than what or whom?. Although,<~~delete "Although" and comma The writers include both sides of view of why Bush thinks his plan works and why the Senate opposes it; however, this article is biased by the choice of words and the tone that is used.<~~You need to be more clear about which wording is biased and how, as well as which words create the biased tone and how~~> The writers present the reader with the president’s declaration, "I've worked with a lot of members of Congress. I've listened carefully to their suggestions, and I have picked the plan that is most likely to succeed . . .” The article also included how Bush offered the Senate “to offer a better plan if they have one.” This quotation supports Bush and makes the reader’s<~~remove apostrophe; there's no possession here feel like<~~change "like" to "that" Bush is considering all options and not doing what he wants while the Senate is. The writers also make the Senate seem like the villains<~~sp? by not agreeing with Bush’s plan and that they don’t trust the president. “Hoyer also promised heavy inspection and scrutiny of the Bush Administration through “a lot” of hearings.”<~~1) Use single quotation marks within double quotation marks; 2) don't end a paragraph or a paper with an unexplained quotation.

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