Among those four choices, yes, C is correct.
Those hideous sentences also need revision for sentence variety! Every one begins with "The store will ... " How boring!!
In addition, each sentence seems to be a topic sentence on its own. There is no paragraph development here.
The store will stay open later during the holiday season. The store will stock a variety of seasonal merchandise.
The store will have many discounts available for holiday shoppers.
22. When revising the paragraph above, the writer should address which of the following?
A. Sentence fluency
B. Punctuation
C. Paragraph organization
D. Writing clarity
i think it's C because both sentences can be combined better to explain the discounts and merchandise.
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but having the store being repeated not mean sentence fluency needs correction?
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