"Rewrite a section from 'Snow' using a different point of view. You can choose any point of view you like. You can also choose to rewrite any section from the story as long as it is atleast 1 paragraph in legth."

Question

This is the paragraph I chose:

"Snow," I repeated. I looked out the window warily. All my life I had heard about the white crystals that fell out of American skies in winter. From my desk I watched the fine powder dust sidewalk and parked cars below. Each flake was different, Sister Zoe has said, like a person, irreplaceable and beutiful."

I want to write this in the omniscient point of view, so to do that all I have to do is replace the eyes with...she? Is that all?

Thanks
-MC

Answer 1

Definition: A method of storytelling in which the narrator knows the thoughts and feelings of all of the characters in the story, as opposed to third person limited, which adheres closely to one character's perspective.

Answer 2

That's already given to me in my book..i just needed to know how i can make it in that point of view..
-MC

Answer 3

“Snow,” she repeated. Yolanda looked out the window warily. All her life she had heard about the white crystals that fell out of American skies in winter. From her desk, she watched the fine powder dust sidewalk and parked cars below. Each flake was different, Sister Zoe told her, like a person, irreplaceable and beautiful.

Answer 4

What was she thinking, feeling? You are only saying what you "see". For it to be omniscient, you have to know things that can't be seen.

Answer 5

Can I get some suggestions please??

Thanks
-MC

Answer 6

Here. I improved it:

“Snow,” she repeated. Yolanda looked out the window warily, dazed at what she was seeing. All her life she had heard about the white crystals that fell out of American skies in winter, but seeing them for the first time truly astounded her. From her desk, she watched the fine powder dust sidewalk and parked cars below, reminding her of powdered sugar on cookies. Each flake was different, Sister Zoe told her, like a person, irreplaceable and beautiful.

-MC