Read the following excerpts from the draft and revision of the Declaration of Independence:

Question

DRAFT:
[He is at this time transporting large armies of foreign mercenaries to compleat the works of death, desolation & tyranny already begun with circumstances of cruelty & perfidy unworthy the head of a civilized nation.
REVISION:
He is at this time transporting large Armies of foreign Mercenaries to complet the works of death, desolation, & tyranny, already begun with circumstances of Cruelty & perfidy scarcely paralleled in the most barbarous ages, and totally unworthy the Head of a civilized nation.
How does the revision's tone differ from the draft's tone? The tone in the revision is more critical and outraged than in the draft.
• B. The tone in the revision is more objective and authoritative than in the draft.
• C. The tone in the revision is more logical and persuasive than in the draft.
• D. The tone in the revision is more neutral and passive than in the

Answer 1

The correct answer is: A. The tone in the revision is more critical and outraged than in the draft.

The revision adds phrases like "scarcely paralleled in the most barbarous ages," which amplifies the emotion and severity of the criticism directed at the actions of the King. This intensifies the tone of outrage compared to the draft.