For one thing, there's a problem with the sequencing of the verb tenses. The main verb is past tense ("did...question") but the subordinate verb is present tense ("can...go"). If you fix that issue, it'll be better.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/verbs.htm#sequence
Please help. How can I word this better?
Rhea did not even question why they can not just all go together up to his room.
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past tensefor am is are
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