My thesis does respond to the prompt and is based on the text, but I think it could be clearer and more concise. A more straightforward thesis statement would help guide the reader better and make my argument easier to follow.

Question

rephrase like a 8th grader

Answer 1

My thesis answers the question and is based on the text, but I think it could be clearer and simpler. A more straightforward thesis statement would help the reader understand my argument better and make it easier to follow.