My previous post didn't post properly so heres a new one.

Question

Can someone please check my work?

James:But we’re so good together,

Susan:We were good together. I’m sorry, but I think we should break up.

James:(Silence)

Susan:James?

James:You think we should break up. (Sighs) I understand your feelings for me have changed. I guess I’m going to have to accept the fact that you don’t want to be with me anymore, so I guess….we break up.

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>Awkward Silence<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<

Jason:(Suddenly walks over) What’s up?

Jason:Looks at James and Susan as they remain silent) Something wrong?

James:We broke up.

Jason:Oh……. (Silence)

Jason:Well, no worries. (Puts his arms around them and pulls them close) Don’t let a messy relationship mess up our friendship. We will always be friends. Hey, why don’t the three of us catch a movie tonight? (James and Susan smile.)

The is the ending part of my assertive communication script. And I find that the ending doesn't sound realistic.

Can someone suggest any ideas on how I can make this more realistic?

Thank You.

Answer 1

I think James might tell Jason that he's busy and walks off. Then Susan might just smile, grab Jason's arm and says something like, I'd love to, then bat her eyelashes at him....