Yes, that's good.
Be sure you correct "is" to "his."
Is this a good beginning to a story:
"As he lay on the ground unconscious, is hand in mine, I saw movement from the corner of my eye and turned to see him- the man I despised most." Thank You
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P.S. It is a realistic fiction story about a young girl in love with her boyfriend and her ex boyfriend. And they both love her.
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Okay, thank you Ms. Sue.When you say correct "is" to "his" you are talking about "is hand in mine" to "HIS hand in mine" right?
Right.
Okay, thank you. :) (:
You're welcome.
Yes i like it. Its really good. Im supposed to make a realistic fiction story too and i want to do it by myself with a little help. i love writing but not this genre i like making stuff up! Good luck. :)