That's all fact, no opinion - therefore, not a thesis statement.
Go back to the last one you posted. It's better than this.
Is this a decent thesis statement?
Developing cultural competence skills for students in Schools of Pharmacy requires hands on learning experience that Service learning offers.
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I've put in bold the part of this that is your opinion. If you can rephrase this so that your opinion comes across more forcefully, you'll have a good thesis statement.
Although most Schools of Pharmacy have added cultural competency training to their curriculum, not all have added the Service learning experience, which should be a requirement for all schools which would involve hands on experience dealing with patients of different cultural backgrounds helping pharmacists to better communicate with their patients.
I've put in bold the part of this that is your opinion. If you can rephrase this so that your opinion comes across more forcefully, you'll have a good thesis statement.
Although most Schools of Pharmacy have added cultural competency training to their curriculum, not all have added the Service learning experience, which should be a requirement for all schools which would involve hands on experience dealing with patients of different cultural backgrounds helping pharmacists to better communicate with their patients.
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