In the novel, To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee, a major character, Jem's view on the world shifts drastically due to his experiences with his hometown

Question

Does this sentence sound awkward? If so, how can I make this sentence flow more smoothly?

Thank you

Answer 1

It is a little awkward: "...Harper Lee, a major character, Jem's..." You might write "...Jem, drastically changes his view..." And I would say Jem's experiences were IN his hometown, not with.

Answer 2

In the novel, To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee, a major character, Jem drastically changes his view due to his experiences in his hometown.

Thank you! Is this what you meant?

Answer 3

you need a comma after "Jem," Jem is a noun, but it tells who the major character is. The subject of your sentence is "a major character," a noun phrase.

Answer 4

Alright! Thanks for your help!

Answer 5

You're welcome.