I think, first, you should explain clearly what the negative impacts are. Do grades suffer? Is the cost of playing the games a bad thing? What unnecessary pressure, to do what? The only clear statement is that such games encourage teens to take dangerous risks.
That might take more than one paragraph. But a topic sentence states the point of the paragraph: violent role playing games are bad or teenagers.
I'm trying to write an introduction to my paragraph can you help,does this make sense?
Many may think that letting teens play violent role-playing games has little to no effect on their behavior. What many don’t know though, are negative impacts on the lives of teens when allowed to play violent role-playing games. Parents who let their kids play video games wonder why their kids aren’t the top at their school. Teens should not be able to play violent role-playing games because students are forced to pay money, they put teens under unnecessary pressure, and they encourage them to take dangerous risks which is illustrated in “High Jinks:Shoot-Out”.
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Many may think that letting teens play violent role-playing games has little to no effect on their behavior. What many don’t know though, are negative impacts on the lives of teens when allowed to play violent role-playing games. Research has shown that many teens poorly in school when allowed to play video games. Teens should not be able to play violent role-playing games because students are forced to pay money, they put teens under unnecessary pressure, and they encourage them to take dangerous risks which are illustrated in “High Jinks: Shoot-Out.”
Many may think that letting teens play violent role-playing games has little to no effect on their behavior. What many don’t know though, are negative impacts on the lives of teens when allowed to play violent role-playing games. Research has shown that many teens poorly in school when allowed to play video games. Teens should not be able to play violent role-playing games because students are forced to pay money, they put teens under unnecessary pressure, and they encourage them to take dangerous risks which are illustrated in “High Jinks: Shoot-Out.”
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Many may think that letting teens play violent role-playing games has little to no effect on their behavior. What many don’t know though, are negative impacts on the lives of teens when allowed to play violent role-playing games. Research has shown that many teens poorly in school when allowed to play video games. Teens should not be able to play violent role-playing games because students are forced to pay money, they put teens under unnecessary pressure causing bad grades, and they encourage them to take dangerous risks which are illustrated in “High Jinks: Shoot-Out.”
Many may think that letting teens play violent role-playing games has little to no effect on their behavior. What many don’t know though, are negative impacts on the lives of teens when allowed to play violent role-playing games. Research has shown that many teens poorly in school when allowed to play video games. Teens should not be able to play violent role-playing games because students are forced to pay money, they put teens under unnecessary pressure causing bad grades, and they encourage them to take dangerous risks which are illustrated in “High Jinks: Shoot-Out.”