I'm looking for someone to proofread my essay and tell me what needs improvement.

Answer 1

Post it here, if it is not a mile long with 10,000 errors, we can probably help. We are not going to rewrite, but can offer suggestions.

Hint: Proof it yourself first. Then read it outloud. Then after making the changes, post it, we can give some very good suggestions. The most common 9th grade essay blunders is that you don't make a point (ie, thesis is not supported), sentences are hard to read (ie, long, full of commas), and subject /verbs don't match.

Answer 2

In Sara Constantakis’s critique and explanation of Still I Rise by Maya Angelou, she reveals the bare bones of Angelou’s confidence, determination, and pride she has in her race to rise above societal normalities and expectations. The author introduces the idea that the so called perfects of our society would view Angelou’s attitude toward her degraded lifestyle as disturbing. The reality is she refuses to get dragged down by their prejudice and racism. I agree with this idea as Angelou writes that no matter what the perfects say or do, she will rise above them, not letting them affect her happiness. Constantakis also points out the poet’s direct confrontation of the perfects in saying she will not give them the satisfaction of knowing they have made her fearful or beaten her down. Alternately, she intends to stare them straight in the face with the confidence of knowing that her disposition makes them uncomfortable. I agree with this idea as I don’t believe in backing down in the case of ethical, moreover moral, rights. The narrator is taking a stand for her divine right to live in equality to the perfects of society. Upon my own multiple readings of the poem, I noticed a previously aforementioned air of confidence as contrasted to the narrator’s appeared arrogance. She has the idea that others will perceive her confidence for arrogance, however, Constantakis does not mention this difference. She only goes so far as to point out the questions posed by the stanza, stopping short of the true meaning of said questions.On the other hand, Sara Constantakis did point out that a controversial idea within the poem involving Angelou’s racial stereotypes and everything she does to break them. She reveals how her race is so much more than what they appear, than what they are made to be. This poem, along with the exploration Sara Constantakis provides, is so powerful as it shows that this world can be more than what it was. Constantakis ends her critique with the meaningful message that this change will come, but “let it come about with grace, unity, mutual respect, and positivity.”