You have it. Just a suggestion to make it more "sophisticated" might be to combine some simple sentences into complex ones.
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I wrote this for my class and I just want to make sure I have it right. The role of education plays a very big part in the financial world. It's a big part of becoming successful. It can help with learning basic math skills in order to better your finances. It can also help with becoming a more responsible adult. Financial planning helps with using money wisely for know and the furture.
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What did Franklin D. Roosevelt do to help the depression in the early 1900s?