I'll do the first two.
1. Alcohol is a dangerous recreational substance that many Americans abuse.
2. The reason people start consuming alcohol is because alcohol can temporarily alleviate feelings of anxiety and depression. People often use it as a form of self-medication.
Let's see what you can do with the others.
I need suggestions on how I could rephrase these without being repetitive and that the point comes across. Thank you (:
1. Alcohol is a dangerous recreational substance that many Americans very much abuse to what their body could take.
2. The reason why people start consuming alcohol and the consequences of consuming alcohol all derives from the topic of mental health and this is all due to the fact that alcohol can temporarily alleviate feelings of anxiety and depression and people often use it as a form of self-medication in an attempt to cheer themselves up or sometimes help with sleep.
*How else could I break the sentence to where it makes sense and gets the point across?
3. Whether low or high consumption of alcohol, alcoholic intake is very dangerous because of its negative effects on the body, making this a threat to an individual’s health, the society at large, and the overall economy of the United States.
4. Despite one’s age, there are dangerous effects on an individual’s health when alcohol is consumed, the surrounding people in the society get affected, and lastly the negative effects on the economy.
* supposed to be thesis. How could it be worded differently and effective?
5. For the previous mentioned important factors, alcohol should not be legalized in the United States of America.
6. In other words, in America, the overall epidemic of alcohol abuse is increasingly high and alcohol is the most common substance that people abuse.
7. The United States is known for its’ increased usage in the consumption of alcohol.
8. A recreational drug is defined as chemical substances that are taken for leisure and enjoyment purposes, rather than for medical reasons. Alcohol is exactly that recreational drug.
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I agree with Mrs Sue
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