I need help writing a sentence outline for my paper. My thesis statement is:

Question

"There is a noticeable imbalance in racial diversity in the pharmacy field, prompting needed reforms in Schools of Pharmacy training programs of cultural competence". I also would like to know is that a decent thesis statement?

Answer 1

That's not a thesis statement yet. It's factual, but your OPINION isn't in there yet.

Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.

Please repost when you've revised this and made a true thesis statement.