I need help with rewriting a theme essay. The structure for the theme essay is intro paragraph (thesis statement with topic) and three examples (body paragraphs) and a conclusion paragraph.

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Do you have specific questions?

Please post your finished and proofread essay here and someone will probably critique it for you.
Before you rewrite your essay, please read and follow the ideas here:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/editing.htm

In addition, once you think it's perfect, have someone read it OUT LOUD to you. You'll undoubtedly hear -- and therefore find and fix -- any errors still there. My recommendation is that you do the reading out loud at least once more -- and make further corrections.

As Ms. Sue wrote, you may post your finished essay if you'd like someone here to critique it for you.