I need help to see if my grammar is right and if I worded everything right. I would appreciate the help!

Question

1. Most people wonder what my ethnicity is.
2. I am happy to explain.
3. My parents were born in Vietnam.
4. Centuries ago before Vietnam became a country, the province was

known as the Kingdom of Champa.
5. At the time, the Chinese invaded Champa territory.
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1. La plupart des gens se demandent ce que mon origine ethnique est.
2. Je suis heureux de vous expliquer.
3. Mes parents sont nés au Vietnam.
4. Il y a des siècles avant que le Vietnam est devenu un pays, la

province était connu comme le royaume de Champa.
5. À l'époque, les Chinois ont envahi le territoire Champa.
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6. In the sixth century, Cham people got their independence from

China rule.
7. The Indians and Javanese invaded during the 10th century.
8. Eventually, people from Đại Việt invaded Champa Kingdom.
9. Those people ended up controlling the Champa territory.
10. About 450 years later, people from Đại Việt claimed the territory

to now be Vietnam.
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6. Au sixième siècle, les gens Cham ont obtenu leur indépendance de

la domination de la Chine.
7. Les Indiens et les Javanais ont envahi au cours du 10ème siècle.
8. Finalement, les gens de Đại Việt envahi Champa Uni.
9. Ces gens ont fini par contrôler le territoire Champa.
10. Environ 450 ans plus tard, les gens de Đại Việt revendiqué le

territoire d'être maintenant Vietnam.
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11. Champa Kingdom was where my ancestors lived.
12. While there is still a lot of Muslim Cham people living in Vietnam,

majority of them moved to Malaysia and Cambodia.
13. War broke out between Vietnamese and Cham people.
14. That is why my dad's family immigrated to Malaysia and became

refugees.
15. My mom's family immigrated to the United States.
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11. Royaume Champa était où mes ancêtres ont vécu.
12. Bien qu'il y ait encore beaucoup de personnes musulmane Cham

vivant au Vietnam, la majorité d'entre eux déplacés vers la Malaisie et

le Cambodge.
Guerre 13. a éclaté entre les Vietnamiens et Cham.
14. Voilà pourquoi la famille de mon père a immigré en Malaisie et

sont devenus des réfugiés.
La famille de
15. Ma mère a immigré aux États-Unis.
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16. Some people were lucky to escape and stay back in what is now

Vietnam because they could not leave the place where they called

home for centuries.
17. I left a lot of details out.
18. There is even more to the story.
19. Yes, my ethnicity is Cham and Malay.
20. I embrace my Cham and Malay culture very much.
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16. Certaines personnes ont eu la chance d'échapper et de rester en

arrière dans ce qui est maintenant le Vietnam parce qu'ils ne pouvaient

pas quitter l'endroit où ils ont appelé la maison pendant des siècles.
17. Je reste beaucoup de détails sur.
18. Il est encore plus à l'histoire.
19. Oui, mon origine ethnique est Cham et le malais.
20. J'embrasser ma Cham et la culture malaise beaucoup.

Answer 1

I'll send this to our French expert, SraJMcGin.

Answer 2

I understand this is a lot for you Mme. This assignment is due monday so take your time in checking my work and editing what needs to be changed and fixed. The sooner the better but whatever you can do to help, I would appreciate it a lot!

Answer 3

Thankyou Ms.Sue

Answer 4

Could you please do a favor for me? These poor old eyes simply cannot slide up and down without blurring. If you could put the French IMMEDIATELY after the English, I would not continually lose my place! example: 1. English sentence 1. French sentence.

1. ...ce qui est ...

2. Because you are feminine, the adjective must be also = heureuse...

3. ok

4. Il y a des siècles, avant d'être un pays le Vietnam,...connue (feminine adjective)

5. à cette époque...le territoire de Champs.

6. ok

7. ...pendant (during) le dixième...

8. ...ont envahi le royame de..

9. If you really want to say "those" = gens-là ont ...le territoire de (or du) Champs. (sorry, but I'm weak on Vietnam history!)

10. "claimed" in the passé composé requires the auxiliary verb, along with the past participle = ont ...territoire qui est maintenant le Vietnam.

11. Le royame de...

12. This is not a complete sentence. Perhaps you could drop "Bien" or "While." = Il y a encore....musulmanes (plural adjective)...qui vivent...d'entre eux se sont déplacés...

13. La Guerre (OR une guerre)...eet les Cham (?)...

14. (That) Celui-là ...la Malaise...(la famille is the subject so both the verb and the adjective reflect that gender & number) = et s'est devenue réfugée. (to make that plural you might say = les membres de la famille de mon père...(se sont devenus, etc.)

15. Is it your Mom ONLY or her family? La famille de ma mère

16. la chance de s'échapper...l'endroit aui était leur domaine (a bit clearer)

17. (a bit too literal; sometimes if you reword the English, it's easier in French)
leave out = omit

J'ai omis...(be sure to drop "sur" at the end.

18. "There is/ae" = Il y a ...

19. I don't know the noun "Cham" so I can't give you the adjectival form for it (the Chams or Cham people= les Chams & peuple Cham = my "guess")...you could drop "le" in front or maqlaiw

20. word order = J'embrasse beaucoup...

I'll come back tomorrow to see if you still have questions. Now I'm sorry I gave away all my books, including my Larousse!

Sra (aka Mme)