1. "...has choked his Bitzer's imagination." Should "his" be in there?
2. yes
3. "the steam engine's piston" is smoother
4 and 5 - OK
I left out the following sentences. Thank you very much.
1) His dictionary definition of a horse underlines how Mr. Gradgrind has choked his Bitzer's imagination.
2) The black of the soot (can soot be replaced by ash and smoke?).
3) Dickens compares the up-and-down movement of the piston of the steam engine (and not steam engine's piston) to the (shaking??) head of an elephant in a state of melancholy madness.
4) In contrast with Sissy (incorrect, better: Unlike Sissy), Bitzer is light haired and light eyed.
5) He calls his students by their number in the class register.
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