You have not written a thesis statement. You have written a statement of fact, and they are not the same.
Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.
To write this, you must be able to state your own opinion/position/stance on the topic. Once you've drafted a thesis statement, feel free to post it if you'd like someone here to check it.
I have to rite a paper on y animal research is benifical. Is this a good thesis statement?
Animal research helps save lives all over the world. It is used to see if a new medicine is safe and the animals used in the experiments are also treated in the most humane way as possible.
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Testing on animals is justified because it is beneficial to everyone including animals, and there are rules to protect the rights of animals used in the research. They also are the only way to test new medication.
Is this right??
Is this right??