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Excuse me. Whispered five-year-old Claire could I have some chocolate milk? Claire our neighbor was normally very shy; but she recently began shewing more bravery. When Claire began, coming to our house in the mourning before school she hardly spoke at all. Claire joined 4 young boys at the breakfast table each weekday morning so Claire mom a chief operating officer could get at to work on time. After I got Claire her chocolate milk she boldly exclaimed thank you for the milk these boys are so weird!
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"Excuse me," whispered five-year-old Claire," could I have some chocolate milk?" Claire, our neighbor , was normally very shy , but she recently began showing more bravery. When Claire began (no comma) coming to our house in the morning before school , she hardly spoke at all. Claire joined 4 young boys at the breakfast table each weekday morning so Claire's mom , a chief operating officer , could get to work on time. After I got Claire her chocolate milk , she boldly exclaimed ," Thank you for the milk. These boys are so weird!"
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