“How dare you tell me what to do?" said the monkey, growling at the bird. The monkey angrily pounced on the bird’s nest, tore it and threw it on the ground. The bird and her chicks were helpless.

Question

Edit the ending of the story, that you see above, to slow down its pace. Then explain how your edit slowed down the story's pace? Refer to Unit 8 Lesson 5 notes from your Connexus lesson.

Answer 1

The monkey hesitated for a moment, staring at the destruction it had caused. It suddenly felt a twinge of guilt and remorse as it looked at the frightened bird and her helpless chicks. Slowly, the monkey approached the bird and began to help gather the scattered twigs and leaves. Together, they built a new nest for the bird and her chicks to reside in.

By adding a moment of hesitation and remorse to the monkey's actions, the pace is slowed down. This allows for deeper exploration of the character's emotions and also adds additional conflict to the story, making it more engaging for the reader. Adding descriptive language and details to the scene also helps to slow down the pace by giving the reader a more vivid picture of what is happening. This can be seen in the slow and deliberate actions of the monkey and bird working together to build a new nest.