The monkey, with a fierce expression on its face, glared at the bird as it said, "How dare you tell me what to do?" The bird flinched at the monkey's tone, but bravely stood its ground. Suddenly, the monkey lunged forward and with sharp claws, began ripping apart the bird's nest. The bird's chicks huddled together in fear as the monkey viciously tore the branches that made up their home, throwing it to the ground in a fit of rage.
By adding more descriptive language and slowing down the actions of the characters, the pace of the story is slowed down. This allows the reader to fully immerse themselves in the story and picture the events as they unfold. The added details give a better understanding of the emotions and actions of the characters, making the story more engaging and vivid. This technique is known as "showing" rather than "telling" and is used to create a more sensory experience for the reader.
“How dare you tell me what to do?" said the monkey, growling at the bird. The monkey angrily pounced on the bird’s nest, tore it and threw it on the ground. The bird and her chicks were helpless.
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Edit the ending of the story, that you see above, to slow down its pace. Then explain how your edit slowed down the story's pace? Refer to Unit 8 Lesson 5 notes from your Connexus lesson.
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