how can i revise this haiku poem?

lunch bell rings
change clinking in our pockets
striving for food

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I assume you're writing a traditional 17-syllable haiku.

Our school lunch bell rings

Our change clinks in our pockets

It's striving for food.
the teacher said it was all goo except for the last last "striving for food" she wants me to show DON'T tell
You'd have saved time for both of us if you had posted what you wanted the first time.

Jumps to cashier's hands.