As a teenager, I was not obsessed about eating out. My family would eat at a restaurant at least twice a week. Every time we went anywhere, it was a challenge for my parents to find a suitable food and a nice quality restaurant. Fortunately, exception I loved the place and this made my parents love it too. The restaurant seemed dreamlike and interesting to me when I was a primary school kid, and, surprisingly, the place still fascinates me today. Walking into the restaurant gives me the best feeling. No matter how many times I visit, I always love to examine what is around me. Each and every kind smile the employees have on their faces and soft foreign music playing always makes me feel relaxed. When I breathe in the aroma of the Italian food, it always reminds me how hungry I am. The uniquely textured walls produces a smooth yet flowing look, it’s almost as I am in a famous building in Rome. The marble tiled floor beneath me gives the restaurant a clean yet warm appearance the server’s kind and gentle eyes look at their customers and politely ask for what they prefer to eat. I always notice the quite atmosphere around me. This makes everyone's mood ever so noticeable this restaurant always seems to have the most friendly customers.
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does it need paragraphs
Yes. And the sentence beginning "Fortunately" makes no sense.
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Hint: there is a paragraph break after that sentence, once you rewrite it so that it makes sense. There may be others. Your second draft will be better. :)