Asked by Anonymous
Revise each of the following sentences, making the illogical comparisons more balanced.
1. That crew is more experienced that the other ship.
2. The gusts of wind at the center of the storm are stronger than the edge.
3. Ships with larger sails are more likely to capsize than smaller ships.
4. A ship with a smaller sail than that ship could weather the storm better.
5. The distance of that ship to the barrier reef is greater than the other ship.
My revisions to the sentences are the following:
1. That crew is more experienced than the other ship's crew.
2. The gusts of wind at the center of the storm are stronger than the edge of the storm.
3. Ships with larger sails are more likely to capsize than ships with smaller sails.
4. ?
5. The distance of that ship to the barrier reef is greater than the other ship to the barrier reef.
1. That crew is more experienced that the other ship.
2. The gusts of wind at the center of the storm are stronger than the edge.
3. Ships with larger sails are more likely to capsize than smaller ships.
4. A ship with a smaller sail than that ship could weather the storm better.
5. The distance of that ship to the barrier reef is greater than the other ship.
My revisions to the sentences are the following:
1. That crew is more experienced than the other ship's crew.
2. The gusts of wind at the center of the storm are stronger than the edge of the storm.
3. Ships with larger sails are more likely to capsize than ships with smaller sails.
4. ?
5. The distance of that ship to the barrier reef is greater than the other ship to the barrier reef.
Answers
Answered by
Damon
2. The gusts of wind near the center of the storm are stronger than the gusts at the edge of the storm.
(near the center, not at it, because the wind is light at the very center)
4. A ship with a smaller sail could weather the storm better than that ship can.
( A seaman would say; that ship is over rigged.)
5. The other ship is closer to the barrier ship than that ship is.
(near the center, not at it, because the wind is light at the very center)
4. A ship with a smaller sail could weather the storm better than that ship can.
( A seaman would say; that ship is over rigged.)
5. The other ship is closer to the barrier ship than that ship is.
Answered by
Steve
There are various improvements which could be made, but minimizing changes to the original syntax, and trying to avoid repetition, I suggest
1. That crew is more experienced than the other ship's.
2. The gusts of wind at the center of the storm are stronger than those at the edge.
3. Ships with larger sails are more likely to capsize than those with smaller sails.
4. A ship with a smaller sail than that ship's could weather the storm better.
5. The distance of that ship to the barrier reef is greater than the other ship's.
1. That crew is more experienced than the other ship's.
2. The gusts of wind at the center of the storm are stronger than those at the edge.
3. Ships with larger sails are more likely to capsize than those with smaller sails.
4. A ship with a smaller sail than that ship's could weather the storm better.
5. The distance of that ship to the barrier reef is greater than the other ship's.
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Anonymous
Writeacher?
Answered by
Writeacher
I agree with Steve.
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