Question

Critique my thesis please?

Sartre uses the ideas he lays out in “Self-Deception” in his short story “The Wall” to establish the connection between bad faith and living toward death, and to reject the Freudian notion of the unconscious in favor of the idea that individuals have complete conscious access to the genesis of and reasons for all actions, though they may choose to ignore this knowledge.

Answer 1

WAAAAAAYYYY too long!

What's the central idea you want to convince others of?

Answer 2

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/thesis.htm

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html

These are two of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. The second one shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into a real thesis statement.

Answer 3

Thank you!

Answer 4

You're welcome.

Once you have your thesis statement pared down to the central idea, please feel free to re-post if you want one of us to check it for you.

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