is this 5 sentences paragraph i wrote myself have good grammar and in chronological order?

Question

The first thing you need to make my favorite sandwich is to gather your three main ingredients, which are bread, mayo and a whole tomato. After you have those things begin by cutting the tomato into nice even slices. Once you have finished doing that,you can now spread the mayo to both sides of the bread. Then you place the sliced up tomatoes on one side of the bread. Last combine the other side of the bread on top of the one with the tomatoes, cut in half and enjoy.

Answer 1

Does your teacher want you to use "you" and its forms in your writing? How could you revise this without all the "you" forms?

Everything else looks fine. The only other thing I see is that there needs to be a space after every comma and period.

Answer 2

Ok thank you for replying I was not told about using "you" maybe I should fix that. I will have to relook over it again. Plus I will fix the spaces, thought I did that but I think when I copy and pasted it on here something messed up.

Answer 3

I think what jars me a little bit in the first sentence is the use of "my" and then "you" -- so if you can get rid of the first-person reference ("my"), the rest might be fine. But be sure to check with your teacher about using second-person ("you") words in your papers.

Answer 4

I rewrote it a little bit leaving out so many "you". Plus I was concerned with punctuation if I missed anything. Thank you for helping.

The first thing needed to make my favorite sandwich is to gather the three main ingredients, which are bread, mayo and a whole tomato. After that begin by cutting the tomato into nice even slices. Now spread the mayo to both sides of the bread. Then place the tomato slices one side of the bread. Last take the other side of the bread and place on top of the one with the tomatoes, cut in half and enjoy.