Question

This is the introduction of my essay , please check it !!!!!!!!!!!!
It would really help

“All men are born equally free”-Salmon P. Chase. A very important character that shapes our society is equality, but many people don’t believe in it. Racism and discrimination are bad problems that we face in our everyday life, which is like prejudice, which limits the ability to succeed in a person’s life. But people try to do their best and take steps to triumph over prejudice so they all can be accepted. But this is wrong because the all should be accepted.

Answer 1

Hmmmm. Your introduction has little to do with the quote.

The quote has to do with freedom, does it not? Your sentences have quite a lot to do with opportunity, social acceptance, you even end with a conclusion (?) that all should be accepted. What does acceptance have to do with freedom?

Answer 2

so what other kind of quote can i use????

Answer 3

Maybe you ought to say what your topic is: is it opportunity and social acceptance on an equal basis? If so, get a quote that says that. I have no idea what your topic is, or thesis is.

Answer 4

well,
my topic is about acceptance and it deals with racism and discrimination
on top of my task page it mentions the quote and my teacher said i should use it

Answer 5

Well, your teacher must be reading something else into the quote that I do not read in it.

Answer 6

okay
by the way thanks

Answer 7

Here is a quote that might help you if you have to use that one assigned also:

"I ask no favors for my sex. I surrender not our claim to equality. All I ask of our brethren, is that they will take their feet from off our necks, and permit us to stand upright on that ground which God designed us to occupy"

Sarah Grimké

http://www.enotes.com/letters-equality-sexes-reference/letters-equality-sexes