Question

I still have a sentence on the listening comprehension for you to check. Thank you.

1) It fights for the release of people imprisoned for racism and political prisoners.
2) Its local groups operate by collecting information about prisoners, and then make (making) pressure on governments, leading newspapers, and embassies.
3) It operates with letters (or by sending letters?) to the prisoner's family and friends as well as to governments. They also raise money to help the prisoners and their families. (the family of them is a mistake???)

Answer 1

1) It fights for the release of people imprisoned for racism and political prisoners.
<b>This is not parallel, and therefore doesn't make good sense. Here's how it reads now: <i>... for the release of people imprisoned for racism and [for] political prisoners.</i> How can people be imprisoned for political prisoners (How can this sentence be phrased correctly?)</b>

2) Its local groups operate by collecting information about prisoners, and then <b>putting</b> pressure on governments, leading newspapers, and embassies.


3) It operates by sending letters to the prisoner's family and friends, as well as to governments.

They also raise money to help the prisoners and their families. <b><~~OK</b>

(the family of them is a mistake???) <~~Yes, that'd be a mistake.