Question

I am writing a paper and I was wondering does this sound like a good thesis?
Cofer shows not only the crazyness women but also shows how men can be harsh.
Ms. Sue
I don't understand what you're trying to say. Please clarify.

Annie
Women is going crazy that a man doesn't care for her so it is driving her crazy.
Men do harsh things like abusing their wife.
Ms. Sue
What did you read by Cofer? Are you supposed to be writing about that story?

Annie
I read A partial rememberance of a puerto rican childhood.
I'm suppose to be writing a essay but I need a thesis to do an outline.
Ms. Sue
Cofer shows how a woman can go crazy when her man ignores or abuses her.