Asked by running.from.myself
Is this a good beginning to a story:
"As he lay on the ground unconscious, is hand in mine, I saw movement from the corner of my eye and turned to see him- the man I despised most." Thank You
GG-KK
P.S. It is a realistic fiction story about a young girl in love with her boyfriend and her ex boyfriend. And they both love her.
"As he lay on the ground unconscious, is hand in mine, I saw movement from the corner of my eye and turned to see him- the man I despised most." Thank You
GG-KK
P.S. It is a realistic fiction story about a young girl in love with her boyfriend and her ex boyfriend. And they both love her.
Answers
Answered by
Ms. Sue
Yes, that's good.
Be sure you correct "is" to "his."
Be sure you correct "is" to "his."
Answered by
running.from.myself
Okay, thank you Ms. Sue.When you say correct "is" to "his" you are talking about "is hand in mine" to "HIS hand in mine" right?
Answered by
Ms. Sue
Right.
Answered by
running.from.myself
Okay, thank you. :) (:
Answered by
Ms. Sue
You're welcome.
Answered by
Megan
Yes i like it. Its really good. Im supposed to make a realistic fiction story too and i want to do it by myself with a little help. i love writing but not this genre i like making stuff up! Good luck. :)