Where do Harry Potter live, when he not are together with all his friends at Hogwarts? He lives with his uncle and aunt in Privet Drive. They do not belong to the magic world, they don’t like Harry, and he does certainly not like them too. Harry loves Ron’s family, and Ron’s mother says, that Harry should come and live with them in the holidays. Why did he always spend his holidays with his ugly and snubbed family? In one of the other books are we told, that their home is the only place outside Hogwarts, where Harry can be safe for Lord Voldemort.

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Where do(1) Harry Potter live,(2) when he not are together with all his friends at Hogwarts? He lives with his uncle and aunt in Privet Drive. They do not belong to the magic world,(3) they don’t like Harry, and he does certainly not like them too(4). Harry loves Ron’s family, and Ron’s mother says,(2) that Harry should come and live with them in(4) the holidays. Why did he always spend his holidays with his ugly and snubbed family? In one of the other books are we(5) told,(2) that their home is the only place outside Hogwarts,(2) where Harry can be safe for Lord Voldemort.

(1) subject-verb agreement error
(2) punctuation NOT needed
(3) run-on
(4) incorrect word choice
(5) incorrect word order

Throughout - keep the verbs all in the present or all in the past. Your paragraphs have inconsistent verb tenses.

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