playing nicely (adverb)
not come but "that came over" = because you began in the past, you should continue in the past
work on, like maybe
I took out another car (drop the 2nd out)
and pull it out (would wobble & pull)
my hands. (end that sentence)
I pulled it back...(begin new sentence)
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I was wondering if in this paragraph I was going off topic, plz help, maybe give me some pointers? Im not finished with the paragraph but that's what I have so far and need someones opinion...
Compassion is like handing a piece of your heart to another person out of love or deep sympathy to show that you care. It is not difficult to learn that the heart cares more than the brain, or happens to trigger certain emotions. The most important quality to teach a child is compassion. Without it, we would be cold heartless human beings with no care in the world about others or the things they go through. A dictionary would say it meant “suffering with others.” That was partly true in my case. I began to set out to teach Nathan this, after all, he was now turning nine months and was walking around a little, but he wasn’t playing nice with the other little toddlers that come over for play dates. He wouldn’t let them play with his toys or give them their toys back after we decided to leave. My parents were also quite worried about this strange phase. I took some time to talk to them and ask them about suggestions on some things I could work on like, maybe showing him how to share toys or maybe being there for him a little more. It was a struggle at first, I would set out his toys but keep the best in the toy box, then show him how the car or truck moved around. Nathan would watch in interest and was captivated by how it would be maneuvered around. Then, I would give it to him to play with, while I took out another car out and played with it too to see his reaction. He was immediately aware that I had another car, and would wobble over and pulled it out of my hands, I pulled it back, but no, he was convinced he was going to get that car.
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but is the essay going on the right path?
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