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Valentina is writing a blog post about visiting her city. In her blog post, four sections of text have been underlined. In each instance, the underlined text may require a correction or revision. Read Valentina's blog post, paying special attention to the underlined text, and then answer the questions that follow.
What to Do in Sommerville
(1) As a teen living in Sommerville, I’ve come across all kinds of amazing things to see and do in my city. (2) In this post, a number of options visitors should check out are described by me.
(3) If you like to hike, bike, or kayak, then you’ll find many places where you can enjoy the great weather and scenery along Sommerville’s lakes. (4) Echo Lake, Zimmer Park, and Buffalo Creek Greenbelt are among my favorite spots.
(5) If your goal is to soak up some culture in the form of art and history, add a visit to the Sommerville Museum of Art and Technology to your to-do list. (6) This innovative museum features informative science displays alongside works of art. (7) The museum Contemporary Sommerville, which specializes in modern art, has special programs for teens, including art lessons and exhibitions featuring young local artists.
(8) There are a lot of coffeehouses and restaurants that feature live music where teens are welcome. (9) If you are feeling hungry, the city’s many restaurants have something for everyone’s tastes. (10) My school even has a Foodie Club that regularly visits Sommerville’s many food trucks. (11) For seafood, I especially enjoy the restaurant El Pescador Morado. (12) A person prepares each dish from scratch, which takes time, but the results are worth the wait!
(13) Whatever your interest or style from culture to kayaks to coffeehouses Sommerville has it going on. (14) See you somewhere!
Valentina shifts voice unnecessarily between sentence 1 and 2. Which revision of sentence 2 corrects the error?
A. In this post, I’ve described a number of options that visitors should check out.
B. A number of options that are sure to please visitors are described by me in this post.
C. Visitors are told by me in this post about a number of options they should check out.
D. In this post, a number of options worth being checked out by visitors are described by me.
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Valentina is writing a blog post about visiting her city. In her blog post, four sections of text have been underlined. In each instance, the underlined text may require a correction or revision. Read Valentina's blog post, paying special attention to the underlined text, and then answer the questions that follow.
What to Do in Sommerville
(1) As a teen living in Sommerville, I’ve come across all kinds of amazing things to see and do in my city. (2) In this post, a number of options visitors should check out are described by me.
(3) If you like to hike, bike, or kayak, then you’ll find many places where you can enjoy the great weather and scenery along Sommerville’s lakes. (4) Echo Lake, Zimmer Park, and Buffalo Creek Greenbelt are among my favorite spots.
(5) If your goal is to soak up some culture in the form of art and history, add a visit to the Sommerville Museum of Art and Technology to your to-do list. (6) This innovative museum features informative science displays alongside works of art. (7) The museum Contemporary Sommerville, which specializes in modern art, has special programs for teens, including art lessons and exhibitions featuring young local artists.
(8) There are a lot of coffeehouses and restaurants that feature live music where teens are welcome. (9) If you are feeling hungry, the city’s many restaurants have something for everyone’s tastes. (10) My school even has a Foodie Club that regularly visits Sommerville’s many food trucks. (11) For seafood, I especially enjoy the restaurant El Pescador Morado. (12) A person prepares each dish from scratch, which takes time, but the results are worth the wait!
(13) Whatever your interest or style from culture to kayaks to coffeehouses Sommerville has it going on. (14) See you somewhere!
Valentina shifts voice unnecessarily between sentence 1 and 2. Which revision of sentence 2 corrects the error?
A. In this post, I’ve described a number of options that visitors should check out.
B. A number of options that are sure to please visitors are described by me in this post.
C. Visitors are told by me in this post about a number of options they should check out.
D. In this post, a number of options worth being checked out by visitors are described by me.
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The correct revision of sentence 2 that addresses the shift in voice is:
A. In this post, I’ve described a number of options that visitors should check out.
This option maintains a consistent voice by using "I" to match the first sentence.
A. In this post, I’ve described a number of options that visitors should check out.
This option maintains a consistent voice by using "I" to match the first sentence.