Question
The following is a draft of a student essay. It contains errors.
(1) If you're anything like me, you like hands-on learning. (2) I have a hard time sitting in a desk for hours listening to a teacher speak or present slides and taking notes, trying to absorb the material. (3) I understand that sometimes that is the best way to share information and learning does not always have to be fun, but I think for learning to be useful, it needs to be more interactive.
(4) It's not just about keeping student interest and breaking up the school year—field trips can be a very effective learning tool provided they are organized. (5) A field trip just for a field trip's sake is not necessarily good even if it is fun. (6) Unfortunately, a lot of field trips take this approach, and this gives them a bad reputation. (7) Just taking students to a museum and sending them off to roam the halls is not going to promote student learning. (8) However, a visit to the museum that has learning tasks and structure can be one of the most effective ways to promote student learning. (9) Similarly, a visit to the planetarium after a unit on astrology can be great.
(10) It is true that field trips can be hard to organize and usually cost money, but a field trip does not have to be a big ordeal. (11) Field trips allow students to interact with the world and apply the concepts they are learning in the classroom. (12) It can be as simple as going to the school grounds to observe the ecosystem there for science class or visiting a local attraction like a park to discuss the government in social studies. (13) The most important thing about a field trip is that it provide opportunities for experiential learning. (14) This is the best way to get ideas to stay with a student long term and is much better than simply testing a student on what they have learned.
(15) Schools need more field trips to better engage students and present the material effectively. (16) When students can do hands-on work in the real word, they learn much more. (17) A field trip can be big or small, but as long as it's done right, it will teach students much and motivate them to work hard when they return to the classroom.
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Which sentence best revises the introduction of the passage to grab the audience's attention and focus them on the argument?
A.
If you are anything like me, you think that visiting museums and science centers is always a better option than staying in school and learning from a textbook or from websites.
B.
If you are anything like me, you like to visit art museums, science centers, and local parks during school field trips to make learning more interactive and interesting.
C.
If you are anything like me, you want to feel the sandpaper skin of starfish at the aquarium, dress like townsfolk in the colonial village, and build models of bridges at the science museum.
D.
If you are anything like me, field trips are most enjoyable when the students are free to roam and discover new things on their own without too much interference.
(1) If you're anything like me, you like hands-on learning. (2) I have a hard time sitting in a desk for hours listening to a teacher speak or present slides and taking notes, trying to absorb the material. (3) I understand that sometimes that is the best way to share information and learning does not always have to be fun, but I think for learning to be useful, it needs to be more interactive.
(4) It's not just about keeping student interest and breaking up the school year—field trips can be a very effective learning tool provided they are organized. (5) A field trip just for a field trip's sake is not necessarily good even if it is fun. (6) Unfortunately, a lot of field trips take this approach, and this gives them a bad reputation. (7) Just taking students to a museum and sending them off to roam the halls is not going to promote student learning. (8) However, a visit to the museum that has learning tasks and structure can be one of the most effective ways to promote student learning. (9) Similarly, a visit to the planetarium after a unit on astrology can be great.
(10) It is true that field trips can be hard to organize and usually cost money, but a field trip does not have to be a big ordeal. (11) Field trips allow students to interact with the world and apply the concepts they are learning in the classroom. (12) It can be as simple as going to the school grounds to observe the ecosystem there for science class or visiting a local attraction like a park to discuss the government in social studies. (13) The most important thing about a field trip is that it provide opportunities for experiential learning. (14) This is the best way to get ideas to stay with a student long term and is much better than simply testing a student on what they have learned.
(15) Schools need more field trips to better engage students and present the material effectively. (16) When students can do hands-on work in the real word, they learn much more. (17) A field trip can be big or small, but as long as it's done right, it will teach students much and motivate them to work hard when they return to the classroom.
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Which sentence best revises the introduction of the passage to grab the audience's attention and focus them on the argument?
A.
If you are anything like me, you think that visiting museums and science centers is always a better option than staying in school and learning from a textbook or from websites.
B.
If you are anything like me, you like to visit art museums, science centers, and local parks during school field trips to make learning more interactive and interesting.
C.
If you are anything like me, you want to feel the sandpaper skin of starfish at the aquarium, dress like townsfolk in the colonial village, and build models of bridges at the science museum.
D.
If you are anything like me, field trips are most enjoyable when the students are free to roam and discover new things on their own without too much interference.
Answers
GPT-4o mini
The best option for revising the introduction of the passage to grab the audience's attention and focus them on the argument is:
**C. If you are anything like me, you want to feel the sandpaper skin of starfish at the aquarium, dress like townsfolk in the colonial village, and build models of bridges at the science museum.**
This option vividly illustrates the experiences that make field trips engaging and relatable, effectively drawing the reader in and emphasizing the benefits of hands-on learning experiences, which aligns with the main argument of the essay.
**C. If you are anything like me, you want to feel the sandpaper skin of starfish at the aquarium, dress like townsfolk in the colonial village, and build models of bridges at the science museum.**
This option vividly illustrates the experiences that make field trips engaging and relatable, effectively drawing the reader in and emphasizing the benefits of hands-on learning experiences, which aligns with the main argument of the essay.