Sure! Here are the grammatical and formatting changes made to your text:
- Sentence Structure: Change "there are different activities to do" to "there are different activities available."
- Clarity: Change "with the added stress of needing to do homework" to "without the added stress of needing to do homework."
- Punctuation: Change "a good amount of time" to "a significant amount of time."
- Clarity: Change "although people might complain on how recess time would be better spent doing homework" to "although people might complain that recess time would be better spent doing homework."
- Punctuation: Change "even so, it is shown that time outside can help one work better" to "even so, it has been shown that time outside can help students work better."
Here’s the revised version with the changes incorporated:
"Schools will have courses like PE, where 30 minutes are required a day. Recess can help with PE since there are different activities available. This is helpful since students won’t have to worry about doing exercise at home without the added stress of needing to do homework. This helps improve a student’s body too as they are doing exercise for a significant amount of time. Although people might complain that recess time would be better spent doing homework, even so, it has been shown that time outside can help students work better."
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