Question

Happiness: What is happiness?

This is what a poet says:

Happiness is a butterfly
which when pursues is just beyond
your grasp...
but if you will sit down quietly,
may light upon you.

This is what I say:

Happiness is the crisp autumn breeze
Which when ignored blows harder and harder....
but if you hold your arms out wide may embrace you with love.

What do you say:

May I please know if my poem sounds good, and I'll appreciate it if you could also create one for me to hear and comment. Thank you very much:-)

Answer 1

Or you could omit "with love."

Sra