Asked by Josh

Can you please tell me what is wrong with this sentence. My teacher underlined it on my paper. What should it say. Thank You

Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage. Jackson's supporters felt like white men should be allowed to vote.

Answered by E.G.
I read somewhere, that Andrew Jackson wanted ALL white men to vote, not just upper-class ones.
So, if that is true, then your sentence should have read: Jackson's supporters felt like all white men should be allowed to vote.
Answered by Writeacher
<b>It's two sentences, but anyway ...

The</b> Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage. Jackson's supporters felt <b>that</b> white men should be allowed to vote.

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<b>In addition, you need to clarify what you're saying. Jackson was for universal suffrage <u>for white men</u>. Before that, only white men who were also property owners could vote. What you've written is incomplete and misleading.</b>
Answered by Josh
Should I take out the first part Jacksonian era was known for the success of expanded suffrage.
Answered by Writeacher
I would switch the two sentences and clarify the second.

Or remove the first and vastly clarify the second.
Answered by Josh
I'm confused.... so in simplier terms what should I be saying? I don't get it?
Answered by Josh
I really don't understand what you mean. I thought that one of Jackson's principles was expanded suffrage which allowed all white men to vote. I honestly don't get what you mean please help.
Answered by Writeacher
Expanded suffrage, yes -- to all white men instead of just white men who owned property. And remember that "white men" meant exactly that -- not including women, not including others who were born in the US but who were not white.

In your statement, you need to clarify <b>what was</b> (white men who owned property could vote) and <b>what he wanted</b> (all white men to be able to vote). Be sure not to call it "universal suffrage," however.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jacksonian_democracy
Answered by Josh
Thank you. I get it now.
Answered by Writeacher
You're very welcome!

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